BA (Hons) Computer Animation Arts, UCA Rochester
Invisible Cities - Online Greenlight Review
OGR 08/10/2015Hi Robin,Before we get to the city itself, a few pointers re. presenting your work for OGR; you've reduced the size of your thumbnails to such an extent that even as a fullscreen document, your presentation is hard on the eyes! I don't think that very strong background template is helping your cause much either. In short, it's all a bit over the place in terms of presentation, but easily remedied next time around; bigger images, and truthfully, most things look best on a nice white background!So, Despina it is... Throughout all of your thumbnails for most of your cities, there's been this rather joyous, child-like quality. In reading your mission statement for your design of Despina, it's clear you're pushing the nautical theme. What's interesting - and difficult - about Despina however is, ultimately, it's not a boat, and actually, in its structures, it doesn't sound completely charming either; there are skyscrapers, antennae, windsocks and factories, with chimneys belching smoke; it almost sounds more industrial than 'sea-sidey' - so less like this:http://i.telegraph.co.uk/multimedia/archive/01694/british-seaside-du_1694839c.jpgand more this:http://i.telegraph.co.uk/multimedia/archive/01848/9_1848236i.jpgThere's technology implied by Calvino's description (radar/skyscrapers/industrialisation), so again, it's not quite that family-friendly, English-resort feeling: isn't this vision of a great ship amongst the dunes a bit more epic, a bit more cinematic, a bit more...https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/236x/4d/6a/0a/4d6a0aaf723ef8b6bb567941c4a575ff.jpghttp://www.originalwildlifeart.com/images/Titanic-Art-final-farewell-desktop.jpghttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7zE19l1e02AIn terms of thinking about the architecture as being 'ship-like', looking at the shapes of these big white wonderful steamships gives you architectural inspiration like this:https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/4/40/Sydney_Opera_House_Sails.jpghttps://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/3/32/Guggenheim_Bilbao_06_2012_Panorama_2680.jpgYou've got the colours and vibrancy of a port town, but again, if you take from Calvino's description a sense of modernity, then maybe the port area is more industrialised and massive, as opposed to 'family friendly' and expo-like:http://images.nationalgeographic.com/wpf/media-live/photos/000/604/custom/shipping-singapore-guariglia_60456_990x743.jpgSo, in summary, I'm wondering if you might need to just look back at Calvino's language re. the type, era and scale of the 'shipness' that Despina shares, and think about something a bit more imposing?